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If days were sad,
I wish I could turn back time.
If days were happy,
I still wish I could turn back time.
So do I wish to turn time,
everyday?
And if... it were possible,
to turn back time,

I wouldn't be the person,
I am today...
This is my first time uploading literature on DA, so I hope its not too bad. This was taken out from a little book that I keep under my bed, filled with personal poems. Simple, I know. This was the first poem in there, so it's a little dated.

It's just a litte thought that's been running through my mind nearly my entire life. I'm sure, there are times in everyones lives, where they have just screwed up, and wished that they could take it back, and ofcourse, times where they just have the best times in their life, that they wish they could do it all again.

This is the question, if you had the chance to turn time, would you? To re-live the many important moments in your life. If I had that chance, I know that there are many mistakes I would have never made, but, you see... Its those mistakes that make me, me.

And if I hadn't gone through what I have, I wouldn't be where I am. Ofcourse, its different for everyone, but think about it.

(^_^)
Poem by me.
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christiangamer Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really good poem.
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oliviaotakusama101 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you dear~ I'm glad you liked and favorited it! Oh and welcome to deviantART! ^^
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christiangamer Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
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Bullcross Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Madame... I can't read your name in Japanese, so I will call you Madame Olivia, this is by far one of the best works I've seen on DA. I can only wonder why this is not on the front page, and some other crap is. It makes one think about the past and the decisions he made... A suggestion: Add rhyme and a block structure and it will be brilliant. *bows, kisses your virtual hand and leaves*
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oliviaotakusama101 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ohhh! I don't deserve your kind words! Really! They are words more fitting for a piece much more well written than that of mine! *blushes red*
Thank you for the word of support and advice! I feel like a million dollars right now! Ahh yes, there is rhyme, but very little (and too simple for mosts taste) but I'll take your suggestions and try and improve on my literature!

When you mean block structure, are you saying get rid of the short verses and just put it as one whole text? (Because I can do that if it means it will be more grammically correct. Thank you again! And thanks for the favorite too! ^^

Oh and my name written in katakana would be pronounced as "Oh-ri-bi-ah" (thanks mom, for naming me an english name..) *Gives virtual hug*
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Bullcross Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, by block structure I mean exactly that :). I just feel it would be better for smaller poems with short verses, but your chosen structure is also possible. I am really glad I made you feel nice, it makes me feel very helpful...
And thanks for that wacht - I will do the same and comment on every literature piece you post - you seem to have a phylosophical point of view on things, which is really interesting.
Have a nice day, Madame Orhibiah. (I hope I got that right)
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oliviaotakusama101 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha Olivia is just fine, yes ok, I'll change it, it does make sense. And yes, I just love literature so much, I don't know why, I just enjoy reading the clever ways the poets use certain techniques to create different effects, or to create a most beautiful visual with only words.

My favorite is either romantice poetry or poetry that just... makes you think and go into deep thought. Well, thats just me, and no problem watching you! I like your pieces too (I can't read the you language either, but I can read the english ones). Yes you were helpful, thank you!
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thecrazymagnet Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   Writer
I think about this a lot. If I could do things over, I'd be able save myself a lot of pain. But you're absolutely right about mistakes making the person - many say true art comes from pain, after all, and every mistake is a learning experience. Not a perfectly constructed poem, but a very mature and powerful argument.
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oliviaotakusama101 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha yes, I think you just said it all. We all wish we could have gone through life without all those troubles, but... its those troubles that make us stronger and make us who we are.

Thank you for the comment, and for taking your time to read darling~! ^^
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thecrazymagnet Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   Writer
Anytime :) good luck with future works, I'm sure they'll be great!
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